The idea came from the wikipedia page for Pun. It informed me that the archaic form was Pundigrion, and so Mr Pundigrion, the unacknowledged diner, was born. Somehow that melded with the game.
It was too short, in the sense that it was cheatingly under the word limit. In another sense, I felt I couldn't add anything to it. I could have spun out the middle for another paragraph or two, but it would have slowed the pace too much for my liking. The whole scene was sitcom enough as it was.
On the other hand, some people missed the mechanics - Jeb wanted to eat, his friends were just punishing him for being a smartarse. Probably solvable with more words.
It was a bit much calling my own story funny in the reviews, but too much negativity just would have been obvious.
I actually tried to write an ending this time. Honest. Next time I'm just having the police take people away, as in Monty Python.
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