It's missing something... hands. According to trusted online sources, advertising illustration of the 50s tended toward close-ups of just faces and hands. I think it's one of those rules that's "true" in a reductionist sense that it's "all you really need to tell a story" but also not true in enough cases that it shouldn't be a rule.
Anyway, just a very small, quick sketch that probably needs hands.
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