kellnerin - Good title, good opening; I wasn't feeling the ending.
response - Probably because when I started typing I didn't have an ending.
ana - ummmkaaay... I've been at trade shows, and it captures the atmosphere nicely.
response - I'm intrigued about 'ummmmmkaaay'. And I quite like peoplewatching at tradeshows.
yicky yacky - More mid-life crises from the tertiary services sector. No; the blue streak isn't important; it's hollow, shallow; it's a token. The state of mind, on the other hand, is important. Suspect the author is entering a traditionally transitional period age-wise and wants to persist with unnecessary illusions. A philosophical, more than writing-skill, observation (the writing was excellent), but intent is everything. Buy a skateboard."
response - Thank you for paying so much attention. You made my favourite comment. While the author does ocassionally get twitchy about turning 30 with no groundbreaking achievements behind her, mostly she is perfectly happy in her tertiary services job. And already has roller skates. She does know a lot of wannabe hippies.
aphrael - Is there a plot? Is there character development? Is this a story? (and not even retyped for me!)
response - harsh. probably fair. Plots aren't my strong point. lack of character development was part of the point.
persimmon - Fun to read, but not much of a story. Crappy dialogue formatting
response - guilty as charged. Fun was what I was aiming for so thankyou.
Did anyone figure I wrote it while it was anonymous or am I just too anonymous for a guess?
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