I actually think I managed to accomplish my goal, except for one part: I wanted it to walk that line between funny in a geeky way and uncomfortable in a "hey, I dated that bitch" way, and I erred far too far on the side of uncomfortable. I blame that on my recent dark mood. I should've written about death and pretended it was some sort of deep metaphor for sex.
So, the reviews:
fleece: at least it makes sense. i had to google for Heinlein to understand what Heinlein porn was. kept me reading, anyway.
I realized after I'd posted that I hadn't actually said what the title of the film was and why it would be Heinlein porn. The title of the film was, of course, The Moon is a Harsh Mistress (thus, the title of the story). I had somewhat naively assumed that most people would be familiar with the book, but I should have written the story so that it would be understandable without the knowledge, but have a bit more depth with the knowledge. Thanks, fleece, for saying that it kept you reading, though - was nice to hear.
2 plus 3 equals 5: I loved this one, but I'm a Heinlein geek. This was funny, in a cringe-producing way. I don't want a girlfriend like that.
Funny in a cringe-producing way was kind of what I was going for, so I'm glad that came through for some people. In regards to the girlfriend, yeah, exactly. Both characters were based on me - the part of me who digs porn, and the part of me who can't help but make fun of the porn, especially in the company of others. I did ask ana the physics questions, though.
persimmon: Hottest scene involving flaccid penis I've ever read. Also, Heinlein. Voted.
Hah! This review made me laugh, especially since the scene was anything but hot when I was writing it. My feeble attempts at writing serious erotica showed me I shouldn't try to do that. Ever again.
Kellnerin: Excruciating. Meant to be, I think.
Scrymarch: Meditations on squirming.
256: i'm not convinced i enjoyed this story. it was well crafted, but the awkwardness was too palpable for reading it to be fun. still, it gets a vote purely on the merit of having caused me to have a heinleinian sex dream the night after reading it.
These, I'm doing together, since they all talk about the major point of failing with this story. But first off, I loved K's reviews. By far the most creative way to talk about a group of stories. Also, 256 made me laugh, though I really don't think I want the details of that dream.
As I said above, the story was meant to be somewhat uncomfortable, but more funny than excruciating and not meant to induce lots of squirmage. That was part of my failure. That, and changing tense for one paragraph (which K was kind enough not to point out). I really shouldn't try to write humor with $evil_project hanging over my head.
|< Okay, so it wasn't quite universal | BBC White season: 'Rivers of Blood' >|