So I wrote it in about two hours of a morning while my spousal unit was out of town. I was lonely, I didn't want to study, and I wanted to try putting some faces to the "he wants sex and she doesn't" sterotype or archetype. Then I realised I would never have enough time to do it in-depth, so I Strunked it, good and hard. This also saved me from filling in embarassingly inaccurate details, since I've never been a man, or had a low-libido wife. Looking at it now, I think it could have used a couple more passes through the Strunkinator.
As with "Songs of the Redeemed," (my WFC1 entry) not much happened in the narrative. I think it's more excusable at this length.
Probably the worst darling I've ever not killed:
- chicken (which should come first?)
Did everyone get that the characters had a baby? Does anyone think the baby information was superfluous and the story would have been better without it? I used "baby" mostly because it's a convenient cultural shorthand.
Oh, and the title is kind of dumb. I couldn't think of anything that told it slant, so I just used the first list the narrator made. I wanted to post it and get back to test-cramming.
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