Too obscure by half   1 vote - 20 %
Even more obscure than that.   1 vote - 20 %
-   1 vote - 20 %
theantix was less obscure   2 votes - 40 %
5 Total Votes
mixed up by Kellnerin (2.00 / 0) #1 Thu Aug 31, 2006 at 10:01:27 AM EST
Huh. Somehow I got the relationship between Susan and Naomi scrambled. I thought Susan was the elder incarnation, and he was talking to daughter Naomi in the present. Which made the last part even more confusing, as that totally twisted up the timeline. Still ... could have used more framing to hold things in place. It's hard to write from a nonlucid POV.

That you and I tied for last place suggests, I guess, that badly written yet anvillicious rates the same as well written but obscure. I think I should have claimed last place solo, but since that wasn't the will of the people, at least I'm in good company.

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