All righty, I read this through and I liked it. In spite of the fact that the violence made me uncomfortable and you the author are dear to me, I remain objective :)


Thus far, we have Luke, the transporter kind of guy sans the husky hunkiness and kung-fu prowess, PJ, the villainous mug of a beast without conscience or remorse, and lastly, the beer/blood/vomit/ dungeon of The Pit.  All have been very nicely portrayed. Dialogue was excellent and the pacing was just right.


Common consensus or not, I would like to see more, and I am sure the characters' "roundness" will come out within the pacing of the story.